6.8–Sample Analysis of a Play

Nicole Hagstrom-Schmidt and R. Paul Cooper

How to Read this Section

This section contains two parts. First, you will find the prompt. The prompt is a very important element in any writing assignment. Don’t be fooled by the fact it is short! Even though it is a short document, it highlights and makes clear every element you will need to complete the given assignment effectively. When writing an essay, the prompt is where you will both begin and end. Seriously. Before you begin, familiarize yourself with the prompt, and before you submit your final draft, give the prompt one final read over, making sure you have not left anything out. When you visit the University Writing Center and Libraries, they can better help if you bring along the prompt. Both the Writing Center[1] and the Libraries[2] provide indispensable tools to aid students, so take advantage of their services.

The second part of this section contains a simulated student essay—the essay is not an actual student essay, but an essay written to demonstrate a strong student essay. The essay in this section is not meant to represent a “perfect” essay; it has its faults. However, this essay is an effective response to the given prompt. The “student” essay will be represented in a wide column on the left, and the grader’s commentary will be represented in a smaller column on the right. Use the example and the comments to help you think about how you might organize your own essay, to think about whether you will make similar—or different—choices.

Sample Prompt

Assignment Description: Compose an essay that uses textual evidence from at least one play we have read to support an argumentative thesis statement. Your essay must be in paragraph format with an introduction, multiple body paragraphs supporting your argument, and a conclusion.

Content: Strong essays will utilize close reading techniques, including attention to dramatic elements, meter, rhyming, double meanings of words, and other rhetorical/poetic features. Furthermore, they will put forth a clear, interesting, and unique interpretation of the text in question. Weak essays will not utilize or discuss the text; rather, they may quote but only to summarize. Weak essays also tend to simply summarize the plot or give surface readings of a passage, character, or theme.

Research Expectations: You are not expected to use secondary sources for this assignment. Supplemental sources, such as the Oxford English Dictionary or a reference to another text we have read, are encouraged but not required.

Format: Follow MLA guidelines for research papers, including the following:

  • 1 inch margins on all sides
  • Size 10–12 readable and professional font like Times New Roman or Arial
  • Double-spacing
  • Header on every page including your last name and page number on the right-hand side.

Scope: 900–1200 words, or 3–4 double spaced pages. This word count does not include the Works Cited page.

Student Essay Instructor Annotations

“Cry shame against me, yet I’ll speak”:
The Silent and Speaking Emilia of Othello

Hannah Elizabeth Bowling

For much of Othello, Emilia functions as Desdemona’s silent shadow. She does not appear on stage until Act 2, Scene 7; she only has 3 lines for the duration of said scene. Indeed, in a play of 3,681 lines, she has only approximately 249 speaking lines, barely 7% of the lines in the play. Shakespeare seems to indicate to his audience through such a small speaking role the sheer un-importance of this character. Yet it is her unassuming nature that makes her the perfect pivot by which the play turns. Of Emilia’s speaking time, almost 40% of it occurs within the last act of the play, indicative of the pivotal role that she plays in this act and by extension her fundamental significance to the play overall.

Hannah Elizabeth begins with a strong opening that immediately identifies the topic of the essay (Emilia in Othello) and uses alliteration (“silent shadow”) to rhetorically engage the reader.


Hannah Elizabeth cleverly sets up her intervention by first stating how many lines Emilia has and then using a “yet” statement to identify her intervention.

In Act 5, the “silent shadow” Emilia proves the most powerful character in the entire play both in word and deed. Towards the end of scene 1, Iago tells Emilia “run you to the citadel and tell my lord and lady what hath happed” (5.1.148–9). She is the messenger sent to Othello and Desdemona to apprise them of Cassio’s near-death experience and of the death of Rodrigo ( 5.1.148–150). Her message of Cassio’s brush with death serves to alert Othello of the suspicious nature of the murder-pact he has made with Iago previously, sowing the first seeds of doubt in Iago (5.2.142–3). When she arrives later in the scene at Othello and Desdemona’s bedchamber door, she interrupts Othello in the act of smothering Desdemona. However, it is not until she enters that Desdemona, miraculously and temporarily revived, delivers her parting lines of “o falsely, falsely murdered…a guiltless death I die” (5.2.144, 150). Her physical presence at the death of Desdemona moves her both metaphorically and literally from the periphery of much of the action and plot of the play to the forefront (5.2.144–153).

Note the effective callback to “silent shadow” in the introduction.


Hannah Elizabeth uses several examples of direct textual evidence in this paragraph. She also varies how she uses her textual evidence, sometimes using quotations, other times using paraphrase or summary.


The writer separates two separate quoted lines with an ellipsis (...) and separates the two lines in her citation with a comma.

However, the best example of her power can be found towards the end of Act 5, Scene 2. Emilia’s physical presence in the bedchamber with Othello and Desdemona allows for her to serve as testimony on three different occasions: as the aforementioned messenger of Rodrigo’s death, of Iago’s deception, and of Desdemona’s fidelity. “You told a lie, an odious, damnèd lie! Upon my soul, a lie, a wicked lie!” she cries upon confronting Iago for his deception (5.2.216–7). “I am bound to speak…your reports have set the murder on,” she continues, positioning herself as a truth-bringer compared to Iago’s falsehoods. She then proclaims to her audience, emphasizing Iago’s prominent role in contributing to Desdemona’s death, that “I found [the handkerchief], and I did give’t my husband” (5.2.274–5). Despite Iago’s constant bombardment of curses like “villainous whore!” and “filth, thou liest,” she persists in making explicit what the play’s audience is already aware of: that Iago requested Desdemona’s handkerchief from Emilia in order to frame her as involved in an extramarital affair with Cassio to Othello.

“However” serves as a great transitional word that signals that this paragraph differs from the previous one.


Hannah Elizabeth expertly weaves quotation with her own wording and argument. This approach both breaks up a longer block quotation and guides the reader to seeing her interpretation.


The writer uses brackets ([]) around “the handkerchief” to show where she replaced a word in the original quotation. This addition provides clarity for the reader.

Emila’s position as Desdemona’s attendant and closest confidant combined with her witness of Desdemona’s death allows her to serve as an effective witness of Emila’s virtuous character. “She was too fond of her most filthy bargain,” Emilia says to Othello, simultaneously defending Desdemona’s love for Othello in combination with an angry, racist condemnation of Othello himself (5.2.192). “Though has killed the sweetest innocent that e’er did lift up eye” she continues, maintaining Desdemona’s fidelity despite Iago and Othello’s combined efforts to discredit her virtue (5.2.237–8). Ultimately it is not her words that prove the most effective in persuading the men present but the bodily harm she endures at the hands of her husband that sways their opinion. After Emilia lays out the entirety of Iago’s deception, Iago kills her in a fit of rage before exiting the stage. With her final breath, she requests to be laid beside her mistress and tells Othello that “Moor, she was chaste. She loved thee, cruel Moor. So come my soul to bliss, as I speak true. So speaking as I think, alas, I die” (5.2.299–301). Even to the point of death, Emilia is adamant of Desdemona’s chastity, and it is her death that ultimately persuades Othello.

“Ultimately” is an excellent word for signaling both the conclusion of an idea and for highlighting the writer’s argument.

Thus, Shakespeare utilizes Emilia as one of the most silent characters in the play to reveal the surprising, hidden elements known by the audience to the rest of the characters, thereby making her one of the most pivotal characters. With well over a third of her spoken lines occurring in the last act of Othello and devoted to exposing both her husband’s mistreatment of the newly married Othello and Desdemona due to his jealousy of Othello and Desdemona’s marital fidelity to her husband, Emilia is the character upon which the climax of the plot hinges. Her presence, both living and dead, serves as a weighty testimony to the truth in the wake of her husband’s lies; while fundamental to the action of Act 5, her significance extends beyond this finite space to the totality of the play.

Hannah Elizabeth provides an effective callback to the introduction by reminding the reader of when Emilia speaks.

The final sentence is a strong conclusion that reiterates the significance of the essay’s thesis and points to future work where the thesis could be developed further.

Works Cited

Shakespeare, William. Othello from The Folger Shakespeare. Ed. Barbara Mowat, Paul Werstine, Michael Poston, and Rebecca Niles. Folger Shakespeare Library, https://shakespeare.folger.edu/shakespeares-works/othello/. Accessed 29 June 2022.

Attribution:

Hagstrom-Schmidt, Nicole and R. Paul Cooper. “Drama: Sample Analysis of a Play.” In Surface and Subtext: Literature, Research, Writing. 3rd ed. Edited by Claire Carly-Miles, Sarah LeMire, Kathy Christie Anders, Nicole Hagstrom-Schmidt, R. Paul Cooper, and Matt McKinney. College Station: Texas A&M University, 2024. Licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-NonCommercial 4.0 International License.

Bowling, Hannah-Elizabeth. “‘Cry shame against me, yet I’ll speak’: The Silent and Speaking Desdemona of Othello.” In Surface and Subtext: Literature, Research, Writing. 3rd ed. Edited by Claire Carly-Miles, Sarah LeMire, Kathy Christie Anders, Nicole Hagstrom-Schmidt, R. Paul Cooper, and Matt McKinney. College Station: Texas A&M University, 2024. Licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-NonCommercial 4.0 International License.

 


  1. University Writing Center, Texas A&M University, 2021, https://writingcenter.tamu.edu/.
  2. Texas A&M University Libraries, Texas A&M University, 2021, https://library.tamu.edu/.

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